I would care not,
if your nightly skies
were without stars,
if the curve of your hips,
had not been.
*This blog baffles so many of my friends. Simply, this blog is a statement from the point of view from a boy, or man, in modern times. He is simply saying, "If you weren't gorgeous, I could careless about you, or anything that makes you happy." It should be obvious what sparked such a harsh, yet truthful blog; some, if not most, males today are sex addicts, and will do anything to get it. By far, one of my favorite poems EVER. However, I often question my choice of title, even though it is nearly immaculate for this poem.
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Wednesday, August 12, 2009
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I deleted my original comment because it had amillion typo's...
Q: In saying Love vs Lust, are you qualifying that if you dont care about external beauty then it is love? IDK about the title. Lovely poem.
And at first I misinterpreted your meaning too. Reading it as it is written, it says that you wouldn't care if there were no stars if your hips weren't curvy. LOL. It's more of a "I could have accepted one fault had the other not existed" thing.. simply wording. I think if you made the first line last it would be clearer.
I like intellectually sparring with you so:
Is it fair to say that you are writing as a guy in modern times? I think the unstated premise is that men were not as they are now in past times. If this is the premise i disagree. Men have always been as they are; a more liberal society has given way to openness about it.
P.O.C. #2- IDK if they are addicted to sex; you cant be addicted to something you don't have. Sex addiction is clinically diagnosed (remember Neo had it) so I disagree with using the word loosely. "Some" of course.. "if not most" no.
Still a sick poem because of the introspective... and analytical perspective.
This Poem/ explanation also made me smile... and it stimulated my mind. Kudos.
Okie Dokie? Okie Dokie.
i don't think the blog is necessarily harsh; i mean...in some cases it is reality, like you said. it is what it is or however it goes. & whatabouttheWomen? lol; women can be sex addicts too -cough, cough-
i think you should've like named it just Lust; since like there's no reference to Love in it or whatever.
i like how it's all short & simple, yet it conveys it's meaning to the readers. i mean i got it as soon as i read the first line haha.
I almost want to delete my explanation. &iwish you guys wouldSTOP bashing my title, when ieven said myself that iquestion it.
-geesh !
Lovely lust, now, Wheres the Lustful Love?? lol
iDidnt have to read that twice to get it's meaning . It kinda made me frown (truth hurts lol)
iAdore this poem - don't be suprised if it appears in a blog of mine .
And love vs lust isn't a horrible title .
It would seem more appropriate though -
If you added a stanza about how easily
a woman could care for a man .
=O let me try ! Lol
Brb . Going to read the poem a million times
Until iCan allow words to flow as beautifully as your
How's this ?
" At first sight iKnew
You'd be the Northern Star-
To light up my life,
And show me the way.
To love... "
Not as good as yours but iThink it conveys a message
Maybe iShould take out the "to love" part .
Erhmm. Sai, if it's ok that I call you that.
The message your poem conveys is different than Miles' message. Your poem seems to be a "love at first sight" themed poem, while Miles' poem is more of a "I'm lusting for you". He's saying that if you didn't look good, then I would have gone **** you. You are saying [or at least my interpretation of it] is wgen I first saw you, I knew I would fall in love with you.
Just my opinion. Maybe you should have refrenced somethng related to lust, not love. Normally, something lighting up someones sky leans toward love.
>_>
Now that I read the comments, I feel stupid. LOL
gg marcus -_-
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